Saturday, November 9, 2013

Fic Feature: Patchwork Heart

Stop me if you've heard this one before: two ponies begin a relationship with a drunken kiss at a party.

"Oh," you might be saying, "it's one of those stories.  Unrealistic, riddled with cliches, probably AppleDash, although a surprise it was the most magical amazing kiss ever and they instantly knew they were destined to be in love until the end of time.  Why would you foist such a story upon us?"

Well, that's exactly the opposite of what this story gives us, and that is what makes this story interesting.  Read more after the break.

 Instead of all the schmaltzy crap you can usually expect, here we open in medias res in the middle of the kiss, and it doesn't go so well.  What makes this story shine is how well it nails the awkward, fumbling nature of the start of a relationship between two ponies who aren't lean, mean sex machines.

Instead of the pairings you usually see all over the place, we have Bon Bon and Carrot Top.  I have a bit of a soft spot for innovation in stories, which is extremely hard to do in shipping, but going against a fanon pairing is a good start.

The characters are also well fleshed-out.  I haven't read much involving Carrot Top, so I can't comment on whether she matches what you usually see or not, but this is not the bitchy, sarcastic Bon Bon we usually get who runs a candy shop with Lyra.  I want to ramble on about what makes Bon Bon interesting in this story, but that would diminish the enjoyment of reading it for yourself.

Being a story that is only one chapter in, I can't promise anything about the quality of the plot, but we have a very strong beginning, and what the story's description promises is certainly interesting:

The romantic history of Bon Bon and Carrot Top,
from alpha to omega, the first kiss to the last breath.

That, ladies and gentlemen, is ambition.  Nearly every shipping story I've read ends with either their first kiss or their first bondage futa fat-fetish sex, depending on the story's rating. Attempting to tell the story of a relationship from the beginning to the day they die is certainly a daunting task, and should give us an interesting tale emphasizing trust and mutual commitment, provided the author doesn't cop out and have them both get hit by a train three chapters in.

If any of what I've said has piqued your interest, give it a try.